Remember the scene from Friday that I realized was now outlined to come to a head with an event that no longer fit the world? Remember how I just kind of rewrote a few lines and then worked to put a button on the scene?
Yeah, last night I had to work on the scene that followed.
The problem now is that, without the strong motivating force of the original version of the preceding scene, the character no longer had a strong motivation for being in that scene. She just kind of sits at the place she's supposed to be waiting to see something.
Then the scene the way it was intended kind kicks in and everything is okay. Once the actual problem enters the scene, people start functioning properly. In fact, in this scene the two characters who jumped out the window (who meet up with the character from the outlined scene) suddenly become stronger in terms of saying and doing what they should.
There's a bit of fire in them that everyone was lacking in the two prior scenes.
I'm hoping that the fire carries though, and everyone feels urgent. I already know that it's something I need to go back and fix in what I've got so far. In fact, chances are very good that the scenes involving all three of these character up until this scene will need to be completely rewritten.
The stakes for the window pair have technically been high, but I feel like there's been no real danger and tension there. Things have happened, and one of them is on the road to death... but nothing feels like it's got weight.
The other character... yeah she needs a real purpose in the scenes before this one. She needs something that matters to actually do. She's setting up an important group of plot points, but that's not enough. There have to be stakes in her scenes.
Anyway, enough prattling on.
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And remember, the great words of Richard Castle...
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